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Band 4.5

If the product is good and meets consumer needs than advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree?

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There has been a debate ,
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about if
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if
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whether
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product
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the product
a product
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 is reliable and satisfies customer needs there is no need
of
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for
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 marketing. Some people believe that if
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the
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quality
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 of
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product
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the product
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 meets the standard of
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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then
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 advertising is just a waste of money .
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While others
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Others
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 think,
in
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that in
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 order to keep growing in the global market or
introducing
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introduce
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 new
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product
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products
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, the marketing is only
a
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apply
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viable way to do so.
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 I agree
,
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that, quality
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the
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quality
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 of
products
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 plays
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a
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crucial role in
success
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the success
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 of any business , there are some advantages of
adds
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ads
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that cannot be overlooked . There is no doubt
about
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that
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, the growth of
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a
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particular business in
long
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the long
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 term
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is
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only possible if the durability of
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product
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the product
a product
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 is better than competitive companies , as customer
satisfication
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satisfaction
 is
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the
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most effective way to increase the sale of
products
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.If buyer needs are
meeting
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met
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 with
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the
a
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product
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 , without a doubt , they will buy more frequently even if there is no advertisement of
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product
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the product
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.
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,
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,
although
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 big companies may
spending
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spend
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 a substantial amount of money on
marketing
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a marketing
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agency
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agencies
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 to promote their
products
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 , the
flourish
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of
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the
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product
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 only relies on
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quality
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the quality
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 of the
product
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 and
consumer
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gratisfaction
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satisfaction
gratification
. On the other side ,
while
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, it is true that if
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consumer
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the consumer
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 is happy there is no need
of spending
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to spend
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 money
on
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apply
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to
commerclise
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commercialise
commercialize
the
product
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,
this
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 trick may only
effective
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be effective
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to
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for
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small scale
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small-scale
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 or local businesses. The expansion of
the
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apply
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businesses , in
this
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 globalized world ,
only
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is only
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 possible if companies are promoting their services and
products
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 online and offline.
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 ,
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 large corporations
such
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 as Nike and
adidas
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Adidas
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have a high
quality
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 of
products
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 and services , they still every year sponsor several sports
event
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events
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 to promote their
businesse
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business
businesses
 worldwide.
Moreover
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, even if
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product
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the product
a product
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 is reliable
but
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apply
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in order to introduce it in the market there is
need
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a need
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of
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for
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 advertisement at
initial
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the initial
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 phase.
Conclusion
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In conclusion
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, no
doubts
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doubt
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the success of
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a
the
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business relies on
effective
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the effective
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quality
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 of the
product
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 and
consumer
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 satisfaction
especially
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, especially
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 for small businesses .
However
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, the
commercelisation
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commercialisation
commercialization
 of
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product
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products
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 is still needed , in order to
growth
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the growth
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 of the
businesss
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business
at
global
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the global
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 level and
intoducing
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introducing
 new
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product
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products
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 in the market.

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task response
Clarify your thesis statement in the introduction to clearly outline your argument. This helps guide the reader through your essay.
coherence cohesion
Consider rephrasing some sentences for better clarity and flow. The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that might confuse the reader.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea, and ensure that you fully develop each point with thorough explanations and examples.
task response
You present a balanced view by acknowledging both sides of the argument, which is essential in IELTS essays.
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Your use of examples, such as referencing Nike and Adidas, provides context to your argument and supports your points.
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