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Below is a map of the town of Bellingham whose population increased considerably between 1980 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the town of Bellingham whose population increased considerably between 1980 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates
development
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the development
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 of the
town
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 of Bellingham
due to
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 an increase in its population from 1980 to 2019.
Overall
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, the
town
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 had expanded its areas, covering only the southwest side at the
begining
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beginning
,
then
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 developing to the
souteast
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southeast
 and northeast
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area
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areas
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. Many infrastructures and transportation had
also
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 been constructed over the period,
connect
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 each
area
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. In terms of
area
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 development, the
town
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initially
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 had only
small
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area
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 in the southwest
part
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 from 1980 to 1989. Its lands
then
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 expanded to both east and west
in
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from
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 1990 to 1999 before having more land in the
northen
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northern
part
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 of its first
area
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.
In
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From
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 2010 to 2019,
another
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other
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 areas were developed, expanding to the eastern and northern
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part
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parts
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 of the map by an association from the government. For transportation and infrastructures, there were only main roads at the
begining
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beginning
. The
town
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than
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then
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 built a railway line to connect each
area
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 in 1990.
School
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The school
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 and hospital were built in 1993 and 2001 respectively,
locating
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 near the railway line. In 2010, a freeway was introduced in the eastern
part
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, connecting two
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area
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areas
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 developed in the final period.
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, in 2012, a sports stadium was built at the junction between the railway line and the freeway.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, area, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urban expansion
  • infrastructure
  • migration
  • population density
  • local economy
  • housing market
  • services
  • planning
  • development
  • urban centers
  • growth trends
  • improvements
  • job opportunities
  • living conditions
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