The diagrams below show how the fish canning is done. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show how the fish canning is done. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show how the fish canning is done. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram
illustrated
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various steps involving canning
fish
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in order to serve
social’s
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social
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need
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needs
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.
Overall
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, the process is quite complex, involving live
fish
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going through
preparing
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preparation
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and canning before sending to retailers. The logical way
to begin
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this
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process begins with
fish
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caught in oceans.
Then
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, they would be frozen at -18
degree
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degrees
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before being defrosted and
weight
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weighed
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. After that, the
fish
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would be unloaded at docks
to begin
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preparing, which involved removing inedible parts,
steam
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and steam
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cooking over hot water.
Then
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, they would be filleted into
pecies
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pieces
species
to fit in cans.
Consequently
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, the fillets are distributed in tins,
which
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in which
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broth (brine, oil and water) will be added and
then
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they would be sealed,
prevent
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preventing
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them from air and other factor that could affect the quality. After that, the cans are sterilized and
labled
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labelled
for distribution.
Then
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, they would be put into storage until being sent to retailers for
customer
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customers
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "to begin".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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