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The given bar chart indicates total spendings on health care as from percentage perspective of GDP in 12 European countries during the years of 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The given bar chart indicates total spendings on health care as from percentage perspective of GDP in 12 European countries during the years of 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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The chart illustrates the European health expenditure as
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a persantage
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persantage
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percentage
 of gross domestic products in 12 European countries during the
years
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of
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2002, 2007 and 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the chart that, Switzerland had spent the highest
proporation
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proportion
 of GDP among three
years
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.
In contrast
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, Estonia
was
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spent
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 the lowest
spent by
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,
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 2% to 4% but it is noticeable French was the only
one
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apply
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contry
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country
who
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which
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 had
high
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higher
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spent
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 than other
contries
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countries
 in 2007.
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, Belgium
was
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spent
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 fiver amount spent during three
years
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 by 10%
while
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 France, Norway and
switzerland
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Switzerland
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had
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fluctuated
accurred
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occurred
 by 10%.
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, Spain, Slovenia and Poland had
rosen
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risen
Rosen
 with the lowest percentage but it had dramatically increased by 8%,
meanwhile
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lithunia
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Lithuania
Lithonia
,
luxembourn
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Luxembourg
Luxemburg
,
netherlands
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Netherlands
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 had some fluctuated
accurred
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occurred
 in every five
years
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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