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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. เริ่ม 12:40

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Nowadays, road
accidents
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 are the most alarming topic
of
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the
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society and
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 are giving their various opinions to overcome
this
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 problem as some people believe that minimizing, the maximum speed on the road will help in controlling the
accidents
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on the other hand
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 some think that there are numerous other ways to handle
this
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 situation. I will discuss both
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views and will give my opinion in the conclusion paragraph.
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 reducing the speed limit on the roads will minimize the chances of miss happenings as a vehicle is more controllable when it is having a less speed. In some countries, they have put speeding cameras on the roads to keep
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surveillance on the vehicles doing rash driving.
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ontario
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 report of 2023 shows less number of road
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 as compared to the prior years because of these speeding cameras.
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, there are many other ways to control
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 situation as lowering
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the speed will create more traffic on the roads so
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another way to halt these
accidents
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 the license before the age of 22.
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according to
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 a survey, most of the
accidents
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 are done by youngsters under the age of 21. Following by the other way, increase in the public transport should be promoted by the society so that there will be less use of the private vehicles.
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, I will say that both
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views have their own benefits as minimizing the speed
make
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 a vehicle more controllable to reduce
the
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accident
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 but
on
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the other side. There are
more
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other ways to handle the situation. In my opinion,
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the second view
have
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outweighing
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benefits
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the benefits
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than
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 the first view.

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You provided relevant examples to support your arguments, such as the use of speed cameras and statistics from Ontario.
task response
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is important for task achievement.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • maximum speed
  • speed limits
  • reaction time
  • stopping distance
  • fatality
  • driving habits
  • traffic education
  • road infrastructure
  • vehicle safety
  • enforcement
  • traffic laws
  • technology integration
  • traffic management
  • high-risk areas
  • strategic planning
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