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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter •explain why you want to reduce your working hours •say which hours you would like to work •describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer

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Dear Sir or Madam I hope
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 letter finds you well.I would like to request a reduction in my working hours as I have enrolled in a part-time IT program.
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 course will help me develop skills that are directly relevant to my role and will benefit the company. I would prefer to work from 8:00 a.m to 14:00 p.m. I still fulfil my key responsibility .These studies will my knowledge and allow me to contribute more effectively to the team. I would the opportunity to discuss
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 at your convenience. Yours faithfully Nigina.

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task achievement
Consider adding a brief explanation of how your studies will specifically enhance the skills you utilize in your current job.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain consistent spacing and punctuation, especially around commas and periods to improve readability.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
You have identified the reason for your request clearly and mentioned the benefits for your employer, which is a strong point.
coherence and cohesion
The letter opens and closes correctly, addressing the recipient appropriately.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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