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The chart below gives the information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when they are relavant.

The chart below gives the information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when they are relavant.
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The bar graph provided compares data, regarding
weekly
Correct article usage
the weekly
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 spending of families in one country across two
distict
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distinct
 years 1968, and 2018. During 1968, families
spend
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spent
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majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of their
income
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 on food
and
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apply
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which is about 35
percentage
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per cent
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 of their total
earning
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earnings
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. In the same year, the second highest spending was on housing, and clothing and
footware
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footwear
, with 10% on each of
these category
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this category
these categories
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. Money was least spent on fuel and power. Only a little more than
5%of
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5 of
 their
income
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were
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was
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 used to purchase fuel and power.
While
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 in 2018, families spent a large portion of their
income
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 on leisure. More than 25%of their weekly revenue
were
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was
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 used for leisure followed by housing and food. In the year 2018, personal goods,
and
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apply
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fuel and power stand at the bottom of the chart in regards to the weekly spending by citizens. In both
the
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apply
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years,
a
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the
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 same percentage of weekly
income
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were
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was
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 used to purchase household goods.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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