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People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Eating
meat
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 is a more debatable topic for people. Some of them claim that
meat
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 should not be eaten
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environment
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the environment
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,
others
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while others
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 argue that fresh
meat
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 is useful for human health.
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 essay disagrees with the statement because eating fresh
meat
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 is one of the significant human consumptions, nowadays. Despite the terrifying relations with animals,
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meat
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the meat
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 of
horse
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, lamb or beef has numerous healthy vitamins
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 as iron, calcium, zinc and others. In the current multi-painful and pandemic period, these minerals are necessary for everyone. Countries from the Soviet period are especially used to eating
meat
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, so it is considered
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the main and important element of national cuisine. Particularly, Kazakhstan and Kazakh nationalities enjoy
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meat
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, every holiday, even each day eat kazy,
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and beshbarmak
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, which can be prepared only by
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meat
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 of
horse
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. It is delicious, valuable and healthy. One of the major factors is eating fresh
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,
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 because long-standing
meat
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 can have come
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, or viruses. Sometimes, supermarkets don’t follow and attract attention to the time frame of products.
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,
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 my opinion it
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 not mean people should never eat
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.
To sum up
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,
meat
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 is
useful
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a useful
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 product for everyone. People should take responsibility for their health and eat what they want.

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task achievement
Clarify your main argument in the introduction to make it clearer that you disagree with the idea that people should never eat meat. A more precise thesis statement will strengthen your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to logically connect your ideas and arguments. Use transition words and phrases to help readers follow your train of thought more easily.
task achievement
In your examples, elaborate more on how traditional dishes reflect the nutritional importance of meat, and how you see this as a benefit for health.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear viewpoint on the topic and attempts to provide reasons supporting your stance.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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