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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the average monthly
variartion
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variation
variations
 in values of copper, nickel, and zinc in the year
of
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2014.
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, all of the percentage
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change
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changes
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 in price compared with
previous
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the previous
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 month of three metals experienced noticeable
flunctuations
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fluctuations
. The nickel had the
largeset
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largest
change
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,
then
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 the zinc and the copper followed
by
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. Across the
change
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 across 2014, a significantly decreasing trend in the first half of
year
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the year
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. As in times of July to September, they maintained the same rate.
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 rest of the
last
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 three months, they had
increasing
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an increasing
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 rate of
change
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. Taking a closer look at the individual result for
geners
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genres
, nickel had
6
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a 6
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% of
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change
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the change
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 in
the
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January, and -
3
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a 3
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% of
variation
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the variation
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 in June, which had
the
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a
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tremendously
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volitality
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volatility
 in its price. In terms of zinc, it went through
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a slightly
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slightly
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 devaluation from July to October within the boundary of -1%,
while
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 it
reaches
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reached
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 its peak in
Feburary
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February
 with
the
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a
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 3%
change
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, which had the opposite trend compared to the others.As for the coppers, it represents the most stable item in the chart with
the
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a
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 variation
less
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 than 3%, and it
maitained
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maintained
 its highest growth rate of 1% in quarter 3.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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