You recently changed jobs, and you want to tell a person who you used to work with about your change of job. Write a letter to that person. In your letter: • describe your new job • explain whether you think it was a good idea to change jobs • suggest that you meet again soon.

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Dear
Arthure
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Arthur
. Hello there, I hope you are doing well today my friend. I would like to discuss about my new
joba
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job
and introduce it to you. I am not gonna ask you
,
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if you remember. Because
,
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I know you remember our time at
work
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it is really missing time already. So my new job is exactly the same. But in
this
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work
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, I have to tidy things on the shelf and make the place untidy. But, I do not have
comunication
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communication
with people. because
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this
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is
online
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an online
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market. I think
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it was
good
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idea when I changed the
work
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. Because
this
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place is
more calmness
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calmer
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.
Furthermore
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, I only have
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communication
with couriers.
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, I want to carry on here.
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Also
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the salary is more than at
last
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work
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. My old friend, I hope, we will meet again.
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, I want to suggest you
to
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meet again in the pub
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and remember
out
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our
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time
in
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at
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work
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. I hope you are happy at your
work
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. Looking forward to
meet
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you again. Best regards. Harry

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use clearer transitions between your ideas to help the reader follow your thoughts more easily.
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Make sure to check for spelling and grammar errors to improve the clarity of your message.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea to enhance overall structure.
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The letter maintains a friendly tone which is suitable for the context.
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You expressed your feelings about your new job clearly, which is important for a personal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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