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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

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In the contemporary era, new employees lack basic interpersonal
skills
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businesses
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 like cooperative
skills
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.
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,
this
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lacking
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lack
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 of
skills
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have
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has
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 negative impacts on
businesses
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. In
this
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 essay, I will justify my opinion with both perspectives. To commence with, an
employee
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 must have good interpersonal
skills
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.
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- Many companies have
an
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apply
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 in the local newspapers that they want
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employee
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employees
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 with excellent
skills
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as
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apply
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to maintain the productivity of any company.
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,
the
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colleagues have to be flexible with the environment, and
team work
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teamwork
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 should be essential to
make
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create
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positive
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a positive
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 environment.
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, the
companies
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company's
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growth
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 will automatically
increases
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increase
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 and
employ
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employees
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 will get their share of
increment
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the increment
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. The head of the companies will have to
assigned
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 specific work to every
employee
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 so, that nothing
left
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is left
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 as
an
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a
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 cause of disputes. Moving ahead, the effects of lacking interpersonal
skills
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 have
lead
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 to
an
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a
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 decline
the
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in the
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 success of any kind of
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business
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businesses
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.
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- Time management is necessary to run any
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businesses
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business
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.
Depite
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Despite
, an
employee
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 working in the mobile
showroon
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showroom
showrooms
, they have to come on time run their shop.
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,
collaboartion
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collaboration
 between an
employee
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 helps in
smooth
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the smooth
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 running of
the
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apply
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businesses
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.
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,
dispute
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the dispute
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 between an
employee
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 affects badly on the
growth
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 of
businesses
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. The manager
have
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 to solve
this
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 environment by listening
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to everyone
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everyone
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everyone's
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 queries and
help
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helping
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 them to find
the
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apply
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possible solutions. In conclusion, the
skills
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 are important for an
employee
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 to work.
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,
missing
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the lack
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of
the
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apply
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interpersonal
skills
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 will lead to
decline
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a decline
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 in the
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businesses
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business's
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growth
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 and
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employee
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the employee
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 itself
loss
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lose
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 their part of
growth
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such
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 as promotion.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on providing a clearer structure in your essay. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically into the next.
task achievement
Develop your arguments more thoroughly. Try to provide more detailed explanations and examples to support your points.
language use
Be mindful of grammar and punctuation to enhance clarity. For instance, avoid run-on sentences and ensure proper subject-verb agreement.
structure
You have introduced the topic and provided a conclusion, which are essential components of an essay.
task achievement
You've identified the importance of interpersonal skills in the workplace, which is relevant to the prompt.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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