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In the future more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?j

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In today's world, a significant number of
people
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 are migrating to different countries.
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, during vacation
time
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 most of those
people
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 prefer to
spent
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spend
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time
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 in their
homecountry
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home country
 rather than traveling to other
foregin
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foreign
 places. To a greater extent, I agree with
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 notion as
people
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 will
favor
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favour
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 their own
country
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due to
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 the emotional connection and to maintain good relationships with their family relatives. One of the major reasons to
belive
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believe
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 that
people
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 will go to
own
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their own
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country
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 on their holidays is because of the
logining
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login
 they
feels
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feel
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,
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apply
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 since they are away from the environment they
born
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were born
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and
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in and
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 brought up. The feeling of yearning and nostalgia play a pivotal role in
this
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decision making
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. In the contemporary world, many are career
drvien
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driven
 and they often neglect their inner feelings.
However
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, these emotions can be higher for the migrated workers because of their isolated feelings in an overseas
country
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, surrounded by different
people
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.
For instance
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, an
indian
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Indian
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 guy working with all English
people
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 in a
co-operative
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cooperative
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 world can feel the rootlessness
as
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of
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 being an outsider.
Therefore
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, whenever possible, they may choose to go back to their
home
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country
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, where they can feel included in every way, like culture,
dressing
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dress
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, food and so on. Another reason worth noting is that
,
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apply
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 the
people
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 who work and study abroad often find difficulties in maintaining
realtionships
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relationships
 back
in
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apply
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home
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.
Due to
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 long distance and
time
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difference
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differences
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, individuals even with
the
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apply
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technologies
such
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 as Facetime and Social media frequently end up being lonely and miscommunicated.
Thus
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, many utilize their
vaction
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vacation
time
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 to visit their loved ones and
spent
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spend
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 quality
time
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 with them.
According to
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 many studies, the migration workers go back to
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home
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their home
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country
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 to visit their parents, partner and friends
often
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more often
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 than
visting
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visiting
 new places. Being away from
people
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 they care for can make them vulnerable
in
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on
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occasions
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occasion
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, especially
while
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 they are
in
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at
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 long
distance
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distances
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.
Thus
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, it is important to
spent
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spend
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time
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 with the
peopler
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people
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 who
matters
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matter
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 to them most. In conclusion, all the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 points justify my viewpoint on
this
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 matter. The
people
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 will choose to
vist
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visit
 their
home
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country
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 in their holidays, rather than travel
new
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to new
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 places. And it is
due to
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 the feelings of isolation and emotional bonds that
people
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 are
otherwise
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 lacking
while
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 they are away from it.

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