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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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It is believed by some individuals that English , which is recently the most spoken
language
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world
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, it is thought that other languages will disappear and people will just speak English only.
This
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language
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 in the
world
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One
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 of the positive points of having only
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language
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 is greater communication between different
countries
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 and less misunderstanding.
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, if everybody spoke
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language
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 people from different areas and different
nationality
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will
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 understand each other easily ,
as well as
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 they
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 transfer
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 and ideas quickly with fewer mistakes.Another benefit of speaking
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 only all over the
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 is improving financial growth. When everyone speaks
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language
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 it will break all the barriers and obstacles for
counties
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 to work together as partners in business deals, in
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 way more financial projects will be established that lead to an increase the income in multiple
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,
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is a clear negative
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 about speaking only
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, speaking
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language
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 will cause the other languages to disappear, and
as a result
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the culture and traditions will disappear with it.
Language
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 is a significant aspect of culture and traditions, different languages mean
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 of cultures , so when
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language
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control
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 the other will
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 with its unique culture.
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, It will decrease the tourist rate , because
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 of the activities travellers do when they visit a new country is to learn a new
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 to communicate with people and explore the diversity of words and voices . Reduction
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 the tourism rate will lead to financial issues for
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 dependent on tourism as a source of income. In conclusion, There are a lot of advantages of having
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 spoken
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 globally , like raising the level of communication between different nationalities with a reduction in
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misunderstanding
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.The problem of
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language
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 are
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disappearance
 of diversity between cultures ,
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 low income in
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 that rely on tourism.

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task achievement
Make sure to rephrase the topic clearly in your introduction, and maintain a more formal tone throughout. For example, instead of "it is thought that" you can say "there is a belief that".
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly, such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'In contrast'. This will help the flow of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors, like missing articles ('the'), or incorrect prepositions. Proofreading can help catch these small errors that may impact clarity.
task achievement
You have effectively outlined both the advantages and disadvantages of having one global language, which demonstrates balanced reasoning.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is important for coherence in writing.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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