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Band 5.5

You are currently taking a course at a university but you will need to have a week off during this course. Write a letter to the university of Dean. In the letter: •Give details of your course •Explain why you need a week off •Say what you want the Dean to do.

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Dear Sir, I am Sakshi Kansara, my student number is N0147802 and I am currently enrolled in
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 learning course for 6 weeks. I am writing
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 letter in
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 a week off as I am visiting my family in India
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 uncertain circumstances, as my grandmother is ill and I have to be present there for her. As it is a language learning course, missing a class would be a huge drawback for my grades.
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, I request you to ask
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the professor
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 if he can record his lectures in the class so later on I can watch the videos and learn
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 I am in India. On
other
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 hand, I can take up
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extra classes too once I am back here.
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, I will always be available via email or text message, if
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 there are any concerns.
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, I request you to approve my leave of absence as it is essentially crucial for me and I will make sure my grades are not affected because of
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 week off. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Sakshi

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Consider adding a brief introduction stating the purpose of your letter more explicitly at the beginning.
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Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity. For instance, consider separating your request and your rationale more distinctly.
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Adding a more formal closing statement could enhance the tone of the letter.
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Your letter has a polite tone throughout, which is appropriate for correspondence with the Dean.
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You clearly state your situation and request, making it easy for the reader to understand your need for a week off.
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