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The plans below show a harbor in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates Porth
Harbour
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Harbour's
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 current progress compared to
in
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2000.
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, it is apparent that the castle in the east-south was turned into a
hotel
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 and the previous public beach is now a private property to the
hotel
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.
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,
currently
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 there are more boat docks and showers and
tolielts
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toilets
. As for the Porth Harbour in 2000, it was fairly simple. Consisted of one boat dock, a small
space
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 marina for the riveter yachts and a large
space
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 for fishing boats. There
only
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 one
showers
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shower
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 and
toilets
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space
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 and an old castle in the south-east of the Harbour with a public beach nearby In the present, another boat dock was added
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 an extra place for showers and toilets. The spaces for fishing boats and private yachts were exchanged with the smaller
space
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 for the boats and the larger for the yachts. As for the old
castle
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castle,
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 it was transformed into a
hotel
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, that
also
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 turned the nearby public beach into a private one that belongs to the
hotel
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.
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, to the west
from
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of
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 the
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hotel
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hotel,
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 a few cafes and shops were built.

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task achievement
The introduction could be more detailed by mentioning the specific changes that took place in the harbor since 2000. Instead of just stating that there has been progress, it may help to indicate the aspects being compared.
coherence and cohesion
While the essay outlines the changes, it could improve its structure by grouping similar changes together. For example, discussing the changes to facilities (like showers and toilets) in one section and changes to the harbor's layout in another could enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
It’s beneficial to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe the features of the harbor. Instead of 'shows,' consider using 'illustrates' or 'depicts' for variety. Similarly, words like 'transformed' or 'converted' instead of repeating 'turned into' might elevate the essay.
task achievement
You effectively convey the overall changes that have occurred in Porth Harbour since 2000, which is key to addressing the task.
coherence and cohesion
The comparison between the past and present features of the harbor is clear, allowing the reader to understand the progression over time.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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