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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.
The given graphs illustrate the
propertion
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proportion
 of using
water
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 in various
area
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areas
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 namely, North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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,
South
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and South
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 East
Asia
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. As can be seen from the pie charts, North
America
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 and Europe
use
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 the highest percentage of
water
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 for
industry
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.
While
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 the biggest cycle in
other
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the other
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 four countries was Agricultural
use
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.
To begin
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 with, there was less than half of people
use
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water
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 for
industry
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use
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 and around 39 per
cent
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 of
water
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use
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 for agriculture.
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, only 13% go to domestic
use
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. In Europe, the
the
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highest figure was approximately 53 per
cent
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 of
water
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 used for
industry
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. Agriculture and domestic were (32%,
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and 15
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%) respectively. In
cotract
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contrast
contract
, in Africa and Central
Asia
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, there were around almost (84%,88%) of
population
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use
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water
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 for agriculture.
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 other sectors were less than 10 per
cent
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 of industrial and domestic uses.
Agrictural
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Agricultural
use
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 was around 71 per
cent
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 in South
America
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.
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industry
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 was the lowest number among other categories. In South East
Asia
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, the number of structural
use
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 was exactly 81 per
cent
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.
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, agricultural was just 12%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, use, industry, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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