The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs enormous government expenditure.This money should be used in new housing and road development.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern age, children
shoud
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should
know the
histoy
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history
of their countries in various means .
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of old buildings costs
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highest
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money, there
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incredible
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economic
benefit
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from it. It is disagreed that
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money should used
in
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new housing and road development.
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some activities that moderately prove
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.  One of the significant
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that conveys cultural history is old buildings.
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, the kids will know about their previous traditions and customs when they see their countries keep to save
accurant
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deteals
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details
. These procedures enhance their experiences and
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their impression.
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reason
prove
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why governments spend money
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restoration
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old
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buildings.  
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, the tourists search for
area
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that have
museames
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museums
, theaters,and art galleries.
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, the
museams
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museums
museum
include
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and precious
artifacts
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artefacts
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which represent the
hisotry
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history
and culture of the region.
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, these
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encourage
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tourists to visit their
counries
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countries
from each side of
world
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in addition
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, they achieve economic benefits in various fields.  In conclusion, the
museams
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museums
seek to reconcile their
tradtion
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tradition
traditional
mission of heritage
presevation
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preservation
and
markting
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marketing
strategies to
creare
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create
new cultural experiences that attract tourists. These strategies have proven the importance of
persaving
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preserving
persevering
historical
sits
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sites
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. I hope that all of us contribute to save our heritage

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