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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should <

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should <
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The line graph illustrates the amount of foreign
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tourist
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tourists
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 in three different
location
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locations
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 in a country in Europe from the
year
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 1987 to 2007. The data shows that there has been
general
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a general
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 increase in the
number
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foreigners
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of foreigners
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 in all
the
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three places in the country over the years of study. Visitors who were going to the lakes started at around the 10,000 mark in the
year
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 1987 where it rose steadily
upto
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up to
 the 40,000
people
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 in the
year
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 1997.
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 the numbers rocketed to approximately 75,000 visitors in the
year
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 2002, before it had a
decline
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 trend to 50,000 in the
year
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 2007. The
number
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 of
people
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 who visited the mountains increased slightly
overs
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over
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 the course of the study years. Starting at the
ranges
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range
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 of 20,000 visitors in the
year
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 1987 to around 35,000
people
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 in the
year
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 2007. The
number
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 of
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tourist
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tourists
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 have been
realtively
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relatively
 stable in the mountains compared to the other two places. The
tourist
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number
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 on the coast started with a slight decrease from 40,000
people
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 in 1987 to around 35,0000
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tourist
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tourists
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 in the
year
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 1992, where it dramatic growth to just above the 70,000 mark in the
year
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 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, year, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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