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Band 3

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school peogrammes

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It is claimed, that voluntary community should be accepted as mandatory in high school programmes. It means, that all educational places will have a special
programm
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programme
program
 like charity, teaching sports
for
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 younger children and others. I agree with
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 statement
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 because it might help all students working and communicating with society, so they could be more diplomatic with each other.
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a
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 usual
lessons
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 it would be great to have charity lessons.
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 are several reasons for
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:
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unpaid community service is a job in which you work with society. So
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, teamwork is especially encouraged, because it will be easier for students
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 work in pairs to find an approach for
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different situations,
neither
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childrens
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that
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 do it by
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. It helps younger to develop useful qualities that may be effective in future.
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all the colleges give priority to individuals
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 have participated in charity more than others, because they look for
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active people.
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 students should contribute
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voluntary
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,
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 since they will be more successful and have more advantages in future. In conclusion, it is necessary to make time for
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lessons that give a
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 skill and experience by working with people.
Thats
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 why government should make it permanent for all high schools.

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Make sure to clearly outline your arguments in your introduction. Consider rephrasing your thesis statement to emphasize the importance of community service more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to link your ideas more smoothly between sentences and paragraphs. This will enhance the flow of your essay.
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Provide more specific examples or experiences related to community service to strengthen your arguments. This could involve mentioning particular projects or outcomes that students benefit from.
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You present a clear opinion on the issue, which is essential in task responses.
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The essay addresses the importance of teamwork and preparation for the future, which are insightful points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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