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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The chart displays the top ten nations for
electricity
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 usage and the
production
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 of
electricity
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 by year 2014.
Overall
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, it is notable to see that China accounted for the most
production
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 and consumption of
electricity
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 among other countries in the recorded period. Most of the countries produce more resources than they used except Germany. China had the highest
production
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 and use of
electricity
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 in 2014, the
production
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 was 5398
billion
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kWh
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, and the use of
the
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electricity
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 was 5322
billion
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kWh
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. The amount of
production
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 and usage is nearly 11 times more than the least country, namely, Korea produced 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 and used 449.5
billion
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kWh
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. The second highest was the United States, which produced 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and used 3866
kWh
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billion
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electricity
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. The remaining countries that produced and used
electricity
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 shared similar amounts of
electricity
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 from 1057
billion
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 to 485.1
billion
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 and 1038
billion
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 to 449.5
billion
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 respectively,
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 Germany is an exception which consumption was more than it produced.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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