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The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the monetary aid from four organizations to developing countries in four different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates economic support from various organizations to countries that face poverty in four different
period
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. As can be seen from the graph,
supporting
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of
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for
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Organization
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 B
was
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apply
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increased dramatically over
the the
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apply
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time.
While
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Organization
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 A and D
was
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apply
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fluctuation in four years.
To begin
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 with, In 2008, Organizations B and C stood at around 1.5
million
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dollars
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. The the supporting of
Organization
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 A rose sharply and the number doubled to 2.5
million
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dollars
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 in 2010. In 2011, the figure peaked at exactly 3
million
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dollars
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. In
contract
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contrast
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,
Orgnaization
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Organization
 C decreased significantly to less than 1.5
million
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dollars
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,
then
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grow
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 slightly and reached again 1.5
milllion
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million
dollars
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 in the
last
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 year.
On the other hand
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, organizations A and D
layout
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laid out
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 the lowest budget in 2008. They spend only almost a half
million
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dollars
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. After that , the figure of
Organization
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 A rose steadily and reached one
million
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 in 2011.
Whereas
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, there was fluctuation in
Organization
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 D between 2009 to 2011. It reached the smallest number in 2011 at 0.3
million
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dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words organization, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • monetary aid
  • developing countries
  • organizations
  • yearly contributions
  • financial assistance
  • economic support
  • trends
  • comparative analysis
  • significant changes
  • global events
  • implications
  • consistently
  • overall trend
  • increases
  • decreases
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