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Living in a foreign country requires a person to interact with a different culture on a daily basis, whether during their studies, work, or social life. Within the context of higher education (university), what are the causes and potential effects of communication breakdown within multicultural project groups? To what extent can a student proactively learn the necessary skills that aid effective intercultural communication?

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 in multicultural groups that cause misunderstanding within
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problems
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 and develop skills and knowledge about different cultures' mentalities and
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your thesis in the introduction to guide the reader through your essay. Each paragraph should support this central idea.
coherence and cohesion
Aim for clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to strengthen the logical flow of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance your writing style and readability.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or anecdotes from real-life experiences to support your points about cultural misunderstandings.
task achievement
You effectively identify the importance of communication in multicultural settings, which is very relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay structure is clear, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is a good foundation.

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