Some people believe that the government should spend more money in more works of art like painting and statues in cities to make them better places to live in. To what extant do you agree or disagree.

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drawing and making statues in different places to look more
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and be able to live perfectly,which
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partly agree with that
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of
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progress by designing it is
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to create different types of painting for the city centre of the towns to get more
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art and design for districts are
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manupulicity
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should control the conditions of
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city more than spending money on random
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which
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will get
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some people.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your position on the topic, and provide a more structured argument in your body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the flow of your ideas by creating smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs so that the reader can follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Try to provide specific examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention specific types of art or cities that have benefited from public art investments.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion on the topic, showing that you have considered both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your use of vocabulary indicates a willingness to engage with complex ideas, which is commendable.

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