It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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saving is
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important for adults, which
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life
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statement, and during
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essay
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will share my thoughts aligned to
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subject that
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have encountered in my personal experience.
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, people should understand the value of
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that plays
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role in their lifetime that lives in the world. Many of us earn massively
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young
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and spend for
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material needs.
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to save for
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life
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leads to struggles and
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recent study shows that most
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adults spend their
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for their own immediate pleasures and not for
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saving
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that
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leads to huge questions
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their upcoming
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to meet
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, the parents should teach
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the habit of saving for
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, we should be mature enough to study the financial
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of the country that will help us to invest our
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savings
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in many ways. As the global crises
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where there is a job downsizing in many organizations,
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will lead
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we should save our
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so that we can
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encounter any financial
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we should have enough amount of
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anyone like our
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or relatives. If we have good enough
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conclusion, it is better to save as much
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money
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during at
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young
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to avoid
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dependence
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will create wealth for your
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generations that can always remember you.
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money
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at any
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that can yield much
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stage of
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Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction could be more succinct and clearer. Consider rephrasing to directly state your position on the importance of saving money for everyone's future, including young people. A clearer, more direct introduction can set a stronger tone for your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates back to your main argument. This will improve the overall logical flow of your ideas. For example, each point made in the body paragraphs should be explicitly tied back to the importance of saving.
Task Achievement
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors. Words like 'completely', 'unwanted', 'children', and 'cultivate' have typos. These small inaccuracies can impact the overall impression of your essay.
Task Achievement
In each main point, aim to include more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments. For instance, when discussing financial crises, you could reference a specific crisis and its impacts on saving habits, making your points more relatable and impactful.
Task Achievement
You effectively highlight the importance of saving money and its impact on financial security later in life. Your personal experience adds authenticity to your argument, which is a strong aspect of your essay.
Task Achievement
Your essay addresses both younger individuals and adults, showcasing a comprehensive viewpoint on the topic. This demonstrates an understanding of the broad scope of the discussion around saving.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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