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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they receive from employers.
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One chart displays the primary reason for studying
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 the
age
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 of students and the other chart illustrates the percentage of employer assistance in varied
age
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groups
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.
Overall
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, students under 26 years of
age
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 indicated that they are studying for their
career
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,
On the other hand
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, over 49
people
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 are the highest at learning for their
interest
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. Another
figure
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 shows that
people
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 under 26 receive the most employer
support
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 among other
age
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groups
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. It is notable that
people
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 under 26 with nearly 80% who chose to study for their
career
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 are the most among other varied
groups
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, in the meanwhile the
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 reflects that only 10% of
people
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 in
this
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age
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group
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 study with their
interest
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.
On the contrary
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, the
group
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 over 48 years old have the highest percentage of
people
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 studying for their interests with nearly 70% and for
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 at approximately 18%. The remaining
age
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groups
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 studying for careers are more than the
interest
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while
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 the
group
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 of 40 to 49 have the same proportion of reasons for studying. The second
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 correlated with the first
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, for those who are studying for their
career
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 relatively receive similar
support
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 as above, the exception is the
group
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 of over 49. The
group
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 under 25 receive the most
support
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 from their employer.
However
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, the
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 over 49 was the least far study aimed at their
career
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whereas
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 they received
support
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 from employers was the third with just over 40%, which is higher than
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30 to 39, and 40 to 49, with just above 30%, and at around 32%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, career, people, interest, figure, support, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Professional development
  • Adult education
  • Career advancement
  • Personal enrichment
  • Academic pursuits
  • Upskilling
  • Reskilling
  • Educational attainment
  • Tuition reimbursement
  • Flexible work arrangements
  • Work-study balance
  • Financial assistance
  • Professional growth
  • Study leave
  • Employee retention
  • Workforce development
  • Time management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivational factors
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