The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.

The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates medium
hours
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spent daily by
teenagers
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and elderly people in leisure and sports activities in the US in 2015.
Overall
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, It is clear from the chart that watching TV is the most popular activity among both elderly people and
teenagers
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.
Oldest
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population has the highest
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hours
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number of hours
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spent per
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in
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watching TV, which is almost double
from
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of
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teenagers'
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teenagers
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one
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with 4,5
hours
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and 2,4
hours
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respectively. Reading books and novels comes in second place by
elerly
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elderly
people with 1 hour spent by a
day
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as
opppose
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opposed
oppose
to
teenagers
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with less than 0,5
hour
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hours
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per
day
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. It is obvious that
oldest
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the oldest
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population has quite less
powers
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power
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than energetic youngsters,
thus
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they prefer relaxing and thinking and spend just over 0.5
hours
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per
day
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doing nothing.
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,
teenagers
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prefer to spend their free time doing
sport
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sports
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exercises for 0,6 per
day
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which is entirely different from elderly ones with 0,3
hours
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per
day
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. Another popular leisure time activity among youngsters is using their computers for entertainment purposes for 1,2
hours
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per
day
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which is
also
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popular among
elderly
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the elderly
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with 0,5
hours
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.
Whereas
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socializing and communicating bar is more or less the same from both perspectives with approximately 0,8
hours
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soent
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spent
per
day
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, teenagers, day with synonyms.
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