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Band 5

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Jenny, Hello. How are you? I hope everything is well. I am writing to give you some
reccommendation
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recommendation
recommendations

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for your first camping holiday. I am sure everything will
good
Add a missing verb
be good

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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 don't worry. You know, I went to camp many times so, you can trust me. Let me explain why you would enjoy
a
Remove the article
apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun camping in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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camping
?
Change the punctuation
.

The punctuation mark may be incorrect here. Consider changing it.

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First,
Linking Words

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when you were a child, you loved adventure and nature. You and
me
Change the pronoun
I

It appears you have used the object pronoun me in a subjective position. Consider changing it.

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 spent a lot of
times
Fix the agreement mistake
time

It seems that times may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 in the jungle. We played
variety
Add an article
a variety

The noun phrase variety seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of games and you felt calm between trees.
Second,
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the experience would be able to give you confidence because when you sleep alone in
tent
Add an article
a tent
the tent

The noun phrase tent seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 that would be scary after the sunrise you would become feel and less
anxcious
Correct your spelling
anxious

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. That would be fun.
However
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, there are some disadvantages. For
examples
Fix the agreement mistake
example

It seems that examples may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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, being alone and darkness. They would be scary
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 some nights would be cold but you can handle all of them. You might use
torch
Correct article usage
a torch

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 and mini heater, they would be beneficial.
Also
Linking Words

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, you should choose cozy places
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

for
Add the comma(s)
, for

It appears that you are missing a comma or two with the interrupter for instance. Consider adding the comma(s).

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 instance, Kaş, Fethiye, Kabak Bay. Especially Kabay Bay is my favourite destination because
this
Linking Words

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 view is amazing. I highly recommend
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 place.
Also
Linking Words

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 do not
forget
Add the particle
forget to

It appears that the verb take should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 take your backpack,
tsirts
Correct your spelling
t-shirts
shirts

If you don’t want tsirts to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

, and boots because you will need them for cold
weathers
Fix the agreement mistake
weather

It seems that weathers may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. Can you let me know if you want to go
to
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 type of holiday with our friend group? I would like to go as together in March. I look forward to hearing from you. Your friend, Ecem

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tone
Make sure to use a more formal greeting and closing to match the context of a letter. For example, consider replacing 'Hello' with 'Dear Jenny' and use 'Best wishes' before your name at the end.
coherence
Ensure that you maintain a clear structure throughout your letter. Each paragraph should focus on a specific idea, and transitions between ideas can be improved for better flow.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling. For instance, 'reccommendation' should be 'recommendation', and phrases like 'after the sunrise you would become feel' need rephrasing for clarity.
content
You have provided personal experiences to support your points, which adds a nice touch to your letter and makes it more engaging.
relevance
Your suggestions for places to camp are specific and helpful, showing that you have thought about your friend's needs.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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