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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages • say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Jenny, Hello. How are you? I hope everything is well. I am writing to give you some
reccommendation
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recommendation
recommendations
 for your first camping holiday. I am sure everything will
good
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be good
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 don't worry. You know, I went to camp many times so, you can trust me. Let me explain why you would enjoy
a
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apply
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camping
?
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.
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First,
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when you were a child, you loved adventure and nature. You and
me
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I
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 spent a lot of
times
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time
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 in the jungle. We played
variety
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a variety
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 of games and you felt calm between trees.
Second,
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the experience would be able to give you confidence because when you sleep alone in
tent
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a tent
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 that would be scary after the sunrise you would become feel and less
anxcious
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anxious
. That would be fun.
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, there are some disadvantages. For
examples
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example
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, being alone and darkness. They would be scary
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 some nights would be cold but you can handle all of them. You might use
torch
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a torch
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 and mini heater, they would be beneficial.
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, you should choose cozy places
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for
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, for
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 instance, Kaş, Fethiye, Kabak Bay. Especially Kabay Bay is my favourite destination because
this
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 view is amazing. I highly recommend
this
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 place.
Also
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 do not
forget
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forget to
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 take your backpack,
tsirts
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t-shirts
shirts
, and boots because you will need them for cold
weathers
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weather
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. Can you let me know if you want to go
to
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on
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this
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 type of holiday with our friend group? I would like to go as together in March. I look forward to hearing from you. Your friend, Ecem

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tone
Make sure to use a more formal greeting and closing to match the context of a letter. For example, consider replacing 'Hello' with 'Dear Jenny' and use 'Best wishes' before your name at the end.
coherence
Ensure that you maintain a clear structure throughout your letter. Each paragraph should focus on a specific idea, and transitions between ideas can be improved for better flow.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling. For instance, 'reccommendation' should be 'recommendation', and phrases like 'after the sunrise you would become feel' need rephrasing for clarity.
content
You have provided personal experiences to support your points, which adds a nice touch to your letter and makes it more engaging.
relevance
Your suggestions for places to camp are specific and helpful, showing that you have thought about your friend's needs.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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