The graph below give information on the number of participant for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below give information on the number of participant for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below give information on the number of participant for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates, the
parcticipation
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participation
of people
on
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in
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various
activites
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activities
at a social centre, which is located in Melbourne, Australia Between the years 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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,
Number
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the Number
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of participants in
film
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the film
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club
are
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is
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at
top
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the top
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over the entire time
period
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.
while
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the participation in amateur dramatics significantly reduced and hit
the
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apply
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rock bottom.
Film
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The film
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club has the highest number of participants and remained stable
through out
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throughout
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the
period
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of 2 decades with around 60 to 70 participants.
Similarly
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, the
amount
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number
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of people performing Martial arts stood at second position
untill
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until
2015. And they didn't
flactuate
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fluctuate
much
through out
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throughout
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the time
period
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, as they were around 30 to 40.
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, the
partcipation
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participation
in amateur dramatics rapidly dropped from the year 2005 from slightly lower than 30 to lower than 5
at the end
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of the
period
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.
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, table tennis and musical performance saw a growth in interest.
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table tennis saw rapid growth from 2010,
while
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musical performance saw the start of participation from 2005 which dramatically rose from 0 to slightly around 20.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • trend
  • activity
  • community centre
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • spikes
  • drop
  • year-to-year
  • prominent
  • overall
  • summary
  • features
  • data presentation
  • analysis
  • observations
  • popular
  • engagement
  • demographics
  • social activities
  • attendance
  • historical data
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