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Band 4

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sir/ /Madam, I am writing
letter
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 regarding your broucher
abuot
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about
one week
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one-week
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 walking tour on to the mountains.
Iam
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I am
 willing to join with you. I am a one of nature lover
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also
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and also
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antusiastic
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an antusiastic
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 people of mountain climb.
from
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 my
child
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childhood
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 hood
upto
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to
 now I
do
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have
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 not
have
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had
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 any
experiance
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experience
 of mountain climb futhermore willing to get
new
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a new
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opertunity
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opportunity
for
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to
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 refreshen
up
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my bussy lifestyle.
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 my carrier activities are very limited.
There fore
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improwing
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improving
 and
maintain
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healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle
physical
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and physical
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activitis
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activities
 are very
femouse
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famous
in
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these days.
Otherthan
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Other than
 that I am suffering from
musele
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muscle
 cramps
while
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 walking
in
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for
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long
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a long
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 period.
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due
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 to thes circuntences I like to join your mountain
climb
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climbing
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 program, want to get more
informetion
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information
 regarding price,
dats
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dates
 and nessary usefull infometion.I am
lookig
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looking
 forward
of
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 your reply. Thank you, Yours faithfully , Rebeka
Rosiro
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Rosario

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Grammar
Make sure to check spelling and grammar (e.g., 'broucher' should be 'brochure' and 'futthermore' should be 'furthermore').
Coherence
Try to use clearer paragraphing by separating distinct ideas. Each paragraph should ideally focus on one main idea.
Task Achievement
Be sure to fully explain your interest in the tour in more detail and ask specific questions about it.
Positive Feedback
You expressed your interest in the tour clearly and showed your enthusiasm for nature.
Positive Feedback
You mentioned your concerns about fitness effectively, which is important for the operator's response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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