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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999. Summarise it.
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The pie chart gives information about survey results of various types of tourist attractions visited by the
people
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 of Britain in the year 1999.
It is clear that
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the
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apply
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visitors
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 are interested in visiting
Theme
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Parks
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 accounting
to
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for
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 38 per
cent
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Overall
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, Wildlife
parks
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 and zoos and Historic houses, Museums and Galleries and Monuments account for more than half of the total number.
Theme
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parks
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 represent 38 per
cent
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 of the
visitors
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.
Difference
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The difference
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 between the number of
people
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 visiting
Theme
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Parks
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 and Museums and Galleries is
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significant
singificant
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significant
 by 1 per
cent
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Theme
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parks
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takes
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make
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 up
majority
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the majority
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 making up to 38 per
cent
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 of the
visitors
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.
Theme
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parks
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 are
further
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 divided into various
sub categories
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subcategories
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 in which,
majority
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the majority
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 of the
people
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 are seen visiting Blackpool
pleasure beach
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Pleasure Beach
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.
Propotions
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Proportions
 of
people
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 visiting Alton
towers
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Towers
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 and Pleasureland, Southport are seen almost equal in numbers. Chessington
world
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World
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 of
adventure
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Adventure
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 and
Logoland
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Legoland
, Windsor together
makes
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make
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 up
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of the
visitors
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 from
Theme
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parks
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, visitors, theme, parks, cent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • attraction
  • tourist
  • results
  • preferences
  • historical sites
  • theme parks
  • museums
  • wildlife parks
  • visitors
  • popularity
  • insight
  • cultural heritage
  • educational experiences
  • cultural enrichment
  • urban experiences
  • nature-related
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