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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the statistical change in the pricing of
cooper
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copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 from January to December of 2024.
Overall
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,
the
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copper,
zinc
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 and especially
nickel
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 rapidly
increasing
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increased
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 by
June
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 and by the end of the year all metals return his old prices.
To begin
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 with
nickel
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, there was quickly
decreasing
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decreased
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 before summer and since
June
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this
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 metal’s pricing gradually
jump
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jumped
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 and from July to September
hold
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held
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same
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the same
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price
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. By October
price
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 suddenly slightly diminished and
then
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 was greatly
raising
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raised
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 and from November to December
nickel
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save
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saved
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same
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the same
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price
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 percentage. The next is
zinc
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, in the
beginning
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beginning,
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 there was quickly rocketing and from February to
June
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become
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became
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 less expensive. In
the
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apply
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October
zinc
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return
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returned
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 his popularity. The copper’s pricing
was
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apply
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gradually
come dawning
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decreased
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 before May and in
the
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apply
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June
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price
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 strongly improved. From July to September was the same
price
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 and
in
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from
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the
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apply
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October to November
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price
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price,
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 a little
decline
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declined
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 and by
Decrease
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decreased
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price
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 again escalated.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zinc, june, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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