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Band 4.5

SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SPACE EXPLORATION IS A WASTE OF RESOURCES , WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT IT IS ESSENTIAL FOR MANKIND TO CONTINUE TO EXPLORE THE UNIVERSE IN WHICH WE LIVE. Discuss both sides and give your opinion .

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The
possibilty
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possibility
 of intelligent life and valuable resources has intrigued researchers for decades.
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this
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 curiosity
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the
givernments
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governments
government
 spend a substantial amount of
money
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 on
space
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explorations
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. Some people think that the excessive cost of
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 projects
are
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 not worth
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it, leading to a waste of resources.
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, others contend
by saying
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, it is
neccesary
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necessary
 to explore as it can help us
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understand the concept of
universe
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the universe
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 and its natural resources.I will discuss both perspectives before presenting my opinion.
Propenents
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Proponents
 of
explorations
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 argue
,
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discoveries
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that discoveries
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 and inventions have always been helped in the development of humanity.
Space
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 exploration can help us to find
the
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advanced extraterrestrial beings who may help us to understand the
principels
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principles
principals
of
technologies
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technology
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 and science which can turn
in
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 human benefits
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 , if scientists get connected with developed aliens they could share medical sciences ,
space
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travels
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 and technologies , leading to progress of the humans.
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, being human it is important to understand the origins of life and the universe, in order to do it
resarchers
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researchers
 should keep exploring
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space
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 which could result in reshaping our understanding
about
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 human existence.
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 ,
although
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 it may fascinating and
beneficary
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beneficiary
beneficial
 for humans to keep searching or reaching out to other planets, only
priortising
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prioritising
prioritizing
space
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 exploration
instead
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 of thinking about public
well- being
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 is not a
preduent
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prudent
present
 approach.
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 ,
the
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governments should spend
money
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 on
space
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 projects only if their public has
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 or good standard of living.
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, investing
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execessive
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excessive
 amount of
money
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 only in exploring
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 is not
wise
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 idea as there are several other social issues which are much more important
such
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 as
poverity
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poverty
, education and
medical
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the medical
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 system .In my opinion, the authorities should
priortise
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prioritise
to resolve
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public issues as it is taxpayer
money
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 and it is meant to be spent on them first and
rest
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the rest
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 of it they can invest in
the
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space
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explorations
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. In conclusion,
space
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 exploration has the potential to help in human development especially in medical sciences by contacting or reaching out
other
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to other
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 planets ,so spending
money
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 on it may
worth
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of
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it.
However
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, if people are struggling for
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basic needs
such
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 as jobs, education, and medical care
while
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 governments wasting
money
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 on
space
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explorations
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 is not a wise approach.A prudent approach , putting public
wellfare
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welfare
 first and
then
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 thinking about
space
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 projects is a viable way for human
developments
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development
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure clarity and coherence in each paragraph. Each point should transition smoothly to the next, helping the reader follow your argument easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of vocabulary and varied sentence structures to enhance your writing and avoid repetition.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or data to support your points. This could include statistics or studies that illustrate the benefits or drawbacks of space exploration.
task achievement
You presented both perspectives on space exploration clearly, demonstrating a balanced approach to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarises your thoughts and reinforces your main argument, which is essential in an IELTS essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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