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Many organization and companies ask their staff to wear a uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? What kind of jobs should have a work uniform?

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plenty of head companies make
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wear the same clothes
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 we you discuss the good and the bad side of
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wear
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uniform
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 I totally disagree with asking the staff to
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dress
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have matching
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uniform
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 could make the company more
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 for each department would make it easier to identify each employee and which department he or
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 they make all of
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the students
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wear the same
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, so no one
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diffrent
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different
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numerous
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 ability to be more creative.
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also
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 of the biggest
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 is the
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employees
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 feel that they do not have
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control
 even with
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 own clothes, and they feel
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unhealthy
. Another point to consider, some
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organisations
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uniform
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 which
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sometimes
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 time it is difficult to
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 them to be clean. I totally agree that
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companies should not force the people
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 work with them to wear a
uniform
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. In conclusion, despite wearing a united
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a
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pleny
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plenty
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advantages
, it would make the staff unsatisfied,and they feel that they can not think out of the box.
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 my opinion , I prefer to be
abily
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able
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 to wear whatever I want at work or school.

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language
Improve spelling and grammatical errors.
content
Develop each point more thoroughly to provide a clearer perspective on advantages and disadvantages.
structure
Ensure the conclusion succinctly sums up the arguments presented.
content
The essay presents both advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniforms which addresses the prompt well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • socio-economic disparities
  • professional image
  • brand recognition
  • restrict individual expression
  • customer-facing industries
  • job satisfaction
  • financial burden
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • identifiable
  • professional appearance
  • sense of belonging
  • corporate identity
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