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The shown line graph below illustrates the conditin of participation by club members to differemt courses. Summaries and make comparisons where relevant.

The shown line graph below illustrates the conditin of participation by club members to differemt courses. Summaries and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives us information about the percentage of participation by club members in three different courses which are swimming,
team
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 sports, and gym activities from 1995 to 2015. As we can see
that
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, both
team
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 sports and gym activities
are has
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 risen from the beginning of the
periode
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period
. Still,
team
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 sports witnessed a bit
slow down
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of a slowdown
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in
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at
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 the end of
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the years
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years
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year
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.
On the contrary
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, only swimming
that
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greatly declined over all the years. In the year of 1995, swimming started at 50% before
fallen
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falling
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 down in 2015 touched nearly 15%. For
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team
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a team
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sport
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sports
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, we can conclude that experienced just above 30% and grew up
regurarly
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regularly
 until 2010
,
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 and decreased to just
berlow
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below
 30% in the
last
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 year. And
then
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, gym activities
also
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 went up stagnantly from 0% in the year
of
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1995 to 20% in the
last
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periode
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period
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words team with synonyms.
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