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It is often said, “when in Rome, do as the Romans do”. Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they visit? Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

Nowadays, many
people
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 believe that we should adapt and accept the
culture
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 of the
country
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 we
visit
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. I would
rather
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prefer to make it
as
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a rule. You need to be aware of the
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culture
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habbits
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habits
 and rules of the
country
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 you
visit
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 . First of all, let's make it clear - there
important
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 rules and traditions different countries have, so we
shoould
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should
 learn the most popular of them to make our journey easy and safe.
For example
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, talking about Asian countries like Vietnam,
Afganistan
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Afghanistan
, Iran,
people
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aware
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are aware
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 that women living there
is
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are
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 forbidden to walk without
her
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their
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 husband or brother. You are going to be arrested for
such
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 crimes if you haven't been prepared yet. In my opinion ,
nowing
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knowing
 the rules helps you to have
safe
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a safe
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 and interesting journey.
In addition
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, you will show your
respet
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respect
 to the
people
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 and
culture
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 of the
country
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. Let's call it a
culture
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 of visiting.
Secondly
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, talking about the language of the
country
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,
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 you are going to
visit
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, there is no
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such
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need to learn it , as it can be really hard. I mean
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such
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languages like Chinese,
France
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French
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,
Arabian
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Arabic
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etc
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, etc
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.
Furthermore
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 , there are many utilities and apps on your phone
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 that can help you
to
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translate the most typical phrases . So
this
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 way you can easily build a small talk with the
people
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 you need (tourist, housekeeper, barista, doctor ). In conclusion,
people
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 should adapt and accept the
culture
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 of the
country
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you
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they
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visit
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, to make
your
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their
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 journey safe, polite, interesting and easy. And installing translators or using dictionaries will help you to
fill
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feel
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so
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as
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 comfortable as a fish in water.

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task response
The essay does not fully answer both prompts. State a clear view in the intro and end with a strong conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas well. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and use simple linking words to show how ideas fit.
language
Fix grammar and spelling. Use simple, correct sentences. There are many errors that make meaning hard.
structure
Clear plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
idea
Main idea about adapting culture is stated.
example
Some examples are used to back points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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