The line chart illustrates the number of women in parliament of 5 European nations from 2000 to 2012

The line chart illustrates the number of women in parliament of 5 European nations from 2000 to 2012
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The line chart illustrates the number of women in
parliament
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the parliament
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of 5 European nations from 2000 to 2012.
Overall
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, the figures for
German
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Germany
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, Italy, France and the UK all increased after 12 years.
In contrast
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, the number of female members in Belgium’s parliament decreased
through
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over
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times
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time
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. In 2000,
German
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the German
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government consisted of almost 35%
woman
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women
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while
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the figures for Italy and France were all around 25%. After 12 years, the percentage of females in Germany, Italy and France rose to 37%, 40% and 32%, respectively. Italy was
also
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the country that had the highest number of female members in parliament in the 5 European nations. In
the
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Belgium’s government, in 2000, the percentage of women was more than 15%
while
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the figure for the UK was just nearly 5%.
However
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, in 2012, the figures for these two nations both collided at nearly 25%. Belgium was the only country of the five
ones
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mentioned to witness a decrease after the 12-year period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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