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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You received a wonderful gift from your friend for your birthday. Write a letter to thank him/her and tell them: What the gift was How you felt when you received it

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Dear Mohammed , I’m writing
with
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fully happy and
proudly
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proud
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 to have a friend like you . The gift that I received from you was very
improtant
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important
to me as you know I need a
laptop
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 for my study and you
give
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 me a great
laptop
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 with
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a high
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high speed
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 CPU
this
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 will help me
on
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 my future . To be honest
this
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laptop
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 was a dream for me . I don’t what I say to express my
feeling
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feelings
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 and how I feel right now . But let me tell you what I felt when I received your gift I felt fully happy and surprised when I saw the gift and to be honest I don’t believe the
laptop
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 that I want on my hands now . Thank you for everything and I’m looking forward to hearing
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 you . Best regards , Hamed

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread your work for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity.
task achievement
Your expression of gratitude and happiness is clear and heartfelt, which adds a personal touch to your letter.
coherence and cohesion
You've structured your letter with a clear greeting and closing, creating a good flow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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