Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were bon What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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All around the World not too many
people
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want to stay and
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enjoy
their whole lifetime in the same area
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where
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they were born. What reason or things are anchoring them in that
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is the
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question as '' to be or not to be'' from Shakespeare.
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, let's have a look at the
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positive
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negative reasons why
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live there or migrate somewhere else. The great benefit of living in the same
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is
people
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will have more
life
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expirience
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experience
and knowledge in their local area than adults. who would be
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visitors over there.
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Furthermore
, a lot of
peiple
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people
still have their own small
bussiness
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businesses
which is targeting and will target the local
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community
so they are quite
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important
for the local
people
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.
In addition
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,
people
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know each other so they have been feeling
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since they were born. On the
ather
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other
hand, adults who want to stay in the same
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since
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they were born til they
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will have quite a boring
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althought
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although
they
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only one small spot in the whole Globe. One disadvantage
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should
be for adults who are already too old
this
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will cause
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of
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in
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their lifetime.
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While
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ago I
had seen
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a lot of positive
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things
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shich
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which
fascinated me so I wanted to spend my whole
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in my born area because all of that
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was what
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I saw
though
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through
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kid's
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eyes
and
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also
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I had
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pay
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rent because
of
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I used to live with
perents
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parents
.
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,
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obviously,
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when I reached
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25 years of
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age I saw a completely but extremely different lifestyle from before so I was
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in a
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different country and
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a different
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hamisphere
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hemisphere
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. In conclusion, whether
people
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want to or they do not want to
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their
life
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in the same spot is because every single person is unique so everyone has a completely different reason to stay in the
place
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where they were born or why they move to
different
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a different
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continent.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points. Instead of broad statements, including personal anecdotes or detailed scenarios can strengthen your arguments.
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You have made an effort to explore both sides of the argument, discussing both advantages and disadvantages, which adds depth to your essay.
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Your use of personal experience adds a unique perspective to your essay and helps engage the reader.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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