The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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the
percantage
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percentage
of home occupants in two countries ( Japan and
Malaysia
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) in the year 2010.
Overall
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, it is clearly shown that
Japanies
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Japanese
people mostly use
a
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apply
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others
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other
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goods and
services
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,
while
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Malaysia
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Malaysian
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people mostly use
a
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apply
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housing expenditure.
According to
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the chart , individuals utilize a majority of other goods and
services
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it
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which
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is about %29 and a minority of
health care
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healthcare
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expense
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expenses
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is %6 in Japan.
On the other hand
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,
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Malaysia
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Malaysian
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citiziens
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citizens
mainly apply the housing outlay
it
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which
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is about %34 and health care
againly
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again
lower it is %3 .
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This
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two country health care consumption is less than other expenditures.
Furthermore
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, in both
countries
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countries,
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food spending
andother
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and other
goods and
services
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is accounted
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account
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over
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for over
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half of all household
expense
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expenses
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.
Moreover
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, transport
services
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is
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apply
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in Japan doubled to
Malaysia
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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