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The map below an island in 1980 as it looks today.

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The two maps illustrate some changes to a small
island
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 in 1980 and now.
It is clear that
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 the
island
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 has changed considerably and added some new
facility
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facilities
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. The main
chenges
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changes
in
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are in
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 the east of the
island
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. in 1980, the restaurant and reception
are
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were
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 located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
island
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, and the accommodation and green area
are
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were
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 situated
in
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on
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 the west and east side. the sea has took place in the north side, and the beach and swimming are located
in
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on
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 the west of the
island
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. There is
also
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 a short road
lingking
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linking
 the
peir
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pair
pier
 with the reception and
restaurand
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restaurant
, and
footpath
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a footpath
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 connecting the huts. Now ,
A
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apply
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new restaurants and shops
has
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have
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 been rebuilt and expanded
instead
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 of
old
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the old
an old
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restaurant
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restaurants
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. The pool was built in the east , resulting in the removal of huts. The diving school has been constructed in the northeast, and a few trees have been planted
arround
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around
of
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apply
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the diving school. A new
appartments
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apartment
 was
bulit
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built
 in the front. There is
surf
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a surf
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 beach
behinde
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behind
 of
appartmets
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apartments
. The boardwalk was erected from the pier to
diving
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the diving
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 school.
Others
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Other
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all
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apply
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facilities
connected
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are connected
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with
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to
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footpath
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the footpath
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, and they have been changed.

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grammar
Make sure to proofread for grammar and spelling errors, such as 'chenges' instead of 'changes', 'appartments' instead of 'apartments', 'lingking' instead of 'linking', and 'beachte' instead of 'beach'.
structure
Try to vary your sentence structures to improve the flow of your writing. Incorporate more complex sentences along with simple ones.
detail
Ensure all changes are described in a balanced way. Some changes are mentioned but could be elaborated on for clarity and depth.
cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas and paragraphs for smoother reading. For example, using linking words like 'In addition' or 'Moreover' can help connect thoughts better.
structure
Good overall structure with a clear introduction and body sections outlining the changes.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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