Many people today work long hours, leaving them with little time for leisure activities. Why is this happened? What problem does it cause?

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In the era of
inflation
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, it is
neccesrey
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necessary
to do more
work
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. majority of
people
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working huge
hours
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and there
have
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less
time
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for
thier
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their
other
activites
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activities
. Behind
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problem
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there are many
reason
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reasons
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such
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as
inflation
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and it cause
numerious
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numerous
of
issuses
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issues
. In the upcoming paragraphs , I will shed the light on all of these
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reasons
and
issuses
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issues
.
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with, the biggest reason behind
this
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problem is
inflation
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.
Due to
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inflation
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,
people
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have to do overtime at their
work
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. Owing
of
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, the working
hours
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they are doing
is
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are
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not sufficient to cover all the
expensive
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expenses
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such
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as
morgadges
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mortgages
,
groccery
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grocery
and other important
expensives
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expenses
expensive
. Nowadays, all the
expensives
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expenses
expensive
are increasing but their salaries are
same
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the same
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so, they are not able to
fulfill
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fulfil
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their all dreams with
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this
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these
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working
hours
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.
Therefore
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, they are doing more
work
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from their
schedule
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time
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.
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Moreover
,
due to
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doing excessive
work
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people
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are suffering from various health problems.
Firstly
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, when
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individuals
are working more
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then
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than
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their
schedule
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hours
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they go through
with
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lots of stress, which can lead
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problems. For
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example
, a study
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conducted by WHO shows that
people
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who are working more
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then
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50
hours
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per week, they are suffering more from hypertension as
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to those folks who are working their
schedule
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hours
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. Afterward, during
overtime
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overtime,
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they are getting too exhausted.
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, they have less
time
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to do physical activities which can
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become a serious
peoblem
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problem
in future because,
people
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are doing already less movement at
office
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the office
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or at their
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work place
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workplace
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so,
they
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so they
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need
time
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for their physical health.
To sum up
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, it is so often to do overtime nowadays, in the case of, to
fulfill
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their expensive. Because the
expensives
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expenses
expensive
are too high
due to
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inflation
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.
However
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, it
cause
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causes
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many problems
such
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serious
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as serious
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health
issuse
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issues
issue
, less
time
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for
thier
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their
body and so on.

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