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Band 2.5

There is an increasing population on the planet, and people are running out of water, food, and fuel. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

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It is
undoutable
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undeniable
 that
overpopulation
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 on the globe is
making
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 serious problems
such
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 as
shortage
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a shortage
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 of natural resources. There are many causes of
overpopulation
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 and
people
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 should solve problems
from
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by
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 increasing human beings.
This
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 essay will discuss what is the main reason
of
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for
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overpopulation
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 and its
soulution
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solution
solutions
. One of the main reasons
about
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for
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 the increasing population is improving medical
service
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services
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. As developing healthcare technology,
indivuduals'
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individuals'
 life expectancy has been getting longer, leading the
overpopulation
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 in the Earth. In the past,
people
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 celebrate someone's 60th birthday specially.
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,
nowaday
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 60th birthday is not a special event, any more. Though
people
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get
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 long lives, our planet
suffer
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suffers
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 from
shortage
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a shortage
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 its resources. To solve the
problems
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problem
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from
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of
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overpopulation
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, governments should
imploment
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implement
 strong
policy
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policies
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 to preserve resources. Alongside governments, individuals must
acknowelge
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acknowledge
about
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apply
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the serious
problem
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problems
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making
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made
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 by
people
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.
To conclude
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, suitable policies and public awareness about
overpopulation
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 could be good solutions
aginst
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against
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increasing
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the increasing
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 population.

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task achievement
Provide clearer examples to support your points about the consequences of overpopulation and the measures to combat it.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your points are logically sequenced in each paragraph, and use transitional phrases to enhance flow.
general advice
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors, as they can distract from your ideas.
task response
You have clearly identified the issue of overpopulation and provided a basic structure for your essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • depletion
  • arable land
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • unemployment
  • healthcare systems
  • overcrowding
  • cost of living
  • family planning
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • agricultural yields
  • conservation
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