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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.
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The graph illustrates data about how families allocated their budgets weekly on eight categories like food, housing, transportation, and so on in both 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the graph indicates some needs experienced upward trends
such
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 as groceries and entertainment.
However
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, there were significant
godown
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 in fuel and personal
goods
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. Another interesting point is that the percentage of food was high in 1968. Looking at the details, in 1968 around one-third per
cent
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 (35%) allocated to meals.
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this
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 graph witnessed a dramatic decrease
by
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 15% in 2018. After
that
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 the population spent their money on their homes, clothing and shoes at the same level about 10 per
cent
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 in 1968.
On the other hand
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, accommodation surged just under one quarter (20%) in 2018 and clothing and footwear declined considerably to
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 5 per
cent
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. In 1968, Leisure levelled off at roughly 9 per
cent
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 but there was a plummeted, increasing significantly to 22 per
cent
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 in 2018. Regarding transport, personal products, and household
goods
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, they were at the same level about 8
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 transportation
increase
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 to nearly 14 per
cent
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 in 2018. What’s more personal
goods
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 dropped to approximately 4 per
cent
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, but household
goods
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 remained stable at 8 per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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