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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sports and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a topic of debate that some individuals have innate abilities that they are born with including several fields
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 as music, sports, and academic skills.
While
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 some people believe that those are gifted ones, I personally think most of the talents can be acquired.
This
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 my opinion. On the
one
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 hand, it is commonly known that genetics play a key role in personal skills. The fact
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 when a family has certain traits , it is more likely to be
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inherited
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 their
offsprings
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.
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, if there are more than
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 family
members
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have
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 a
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 writing skill, the
probablity
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probability
 that they might be a good writer would increase. A recent study found that if
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 of the parents is talented in a specific area, their kids mostly will be gifted in the same way as well.
On the other hand
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, every talent can be learnable with consistent practice and training
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 being passionate about it. Football is a sport that most of
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society
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 interested in, and there are a high number of football academies that train
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 players to improve their
performence
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performance
,
this
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 can lead to the fact that everything can be learned with practice. I believe that if anyone has an interest in music or
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a certain
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 kind of sport, it is not impossible to learn with
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consistency
 and well training.
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, it is argued that
one
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 can become
talened
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talented
 in a specific field is challenging and tough if it is not innate .
However
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, I think that everything can be acquired with patience and good practice.

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task achievement
Consider elaborating further on the opposing viewpoint of natural talent. You could include examples of famous musicians or athletes who have trained extensively despite not being initially talented. This would strengthen your overall argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that there are smooth transitions between your ideas. For example, using linking words such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', or 'Conversely' can help guide the reader through your points more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Check for minor spelling errors (e.g., 'inherted' should be 'inherited' and 'probablity' should be 'probability'). Correcting these will enhance your overall impression.
positive
The introduction clearly outlines your point of view and sets the stage for the discussion.
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You effectively present arguments for both sides of the debate, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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