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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate a
school
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 site development over 20 years, between 2004 and 2024.
Besides
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 the architectural changes, the number of students increased in
this
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 period. The data collected throughout
this
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 period shows new constructions. Starting
by
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with
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the
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apply
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School
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 Building 1, which now has a cover pathway to
School
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 Building 2. Close to the
School
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 building 2 a route was constructed, communicating the
car
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park
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 1 to the
car
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park
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 2. The Sports Field that was on the east of the diagram has been built in a small proportion in the southeast of the map and, in its old place, a new
car
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park
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 was developed.
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 the increase
of
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in
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 students’ numbers, a new edifice was created, replacing the previous sports field. Near
car
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park
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 2, in the
Est
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east
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 direction, more trees were planted. The path in the 2004 diagram was longer and went from the main entrance to the sports field. In 2024,
this
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 path is shorter and goes from
school
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 buildings 1 and 2 to the building number 3.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • layout
  • facility
  • infrastructure
  • main building
  • green area
  • sports hall
  • library
  • expanded
  • recreational activities
  • structural improvements
  • accommodate
  • enrollment
  • renovation
  • development
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