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Nowadays, artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or a negative development?

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In recent years, the use of artificial intelligence in driving cars has increased significantly.
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advancement
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 in
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technology and it should be seen as a positive development because it saves
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. People trust machines because of their fast learning ability. Unlike humans, machines do not need
time
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 or
ability
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 to learn something. They can save that particular skill to their data and
demonstrates
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 it perfectly in short amounts of
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 in almost all
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 they do not make mistakes because it is programmed and put into their memory cards, different from us who learn something through experience.
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,
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 cars have cards that contain all routes of the city and can take their owner to the destination by voice command.
Automations
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Automation
 should be welcomed because it gives us
time
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 to concentrate on more important tasks. From the statistics,
waste
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average
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an average
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 of
2hours
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2 hours
 in traffic
jam
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 daily. If the car drives by itself,
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 of wasting
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 doing nothing in the car, we can use that
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 in the vehicle to do other tasks
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 as reading or knitting to seek our true passions.
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, busy college students can do their homework during rush hour in automated cars
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 and can level up academically.
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, they will have
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 to spend with their loved ones and focus on their passions, like reading diving or cycling. In conclusion, machines are becoming more reliable as it is
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, and
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 should be seen positively as they give us the opportunity to form emotional bonds with our family and succeed academically.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly connects to the essay question and supports your main argument. Avoid introducing unrelated ideas; instead, build upon your points to strengthen your argument.
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Provide a more balanced view on the advantages and disadvantages of AI in driving. Acknowledging both sides would enhance the depth of your argument.
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Expand on your examples to provide more context and explanation. For instance, you could elaborate on how automated driving enhances safety or addresses traffic efficiency.
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The introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion about AI in driving and clearly states a positive stance.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the key points well and reiterates the positive view of technological advancement in driving.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • autonomous vehicles
  • traffic management
  • route optimization
  • human error
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • convenience
  • elderly
  • disabled individuals
  • job displacement
  • logistics
  • transportation
  • implementation
  • maintenance
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