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There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globalisation is undoubtedly it is useful for universal
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economic development, cultural exchange, trade, socialism and mainly migration, Investment and technology all
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 by socialising humankind together through business. Some people are in the way to
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 the path of the process.
According to
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 my perspective, Interdependence is extremely beneficial in many views that can be migration
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 from one nation to another georgic.
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, Employment opportunities and higher education for students who can get greater careers in future.
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 in trade, For movement of
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 border of goods and service export business like clothes, electronic items which is more tradeable nowadays and
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 most essential over the world.
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, It is a vital part of
countries
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' cultural exchange through ideas of tradition and their lifestyles. For illustration, Music and movies
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a entertainment
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 the whole world by experimenting with new ideas and thoughts with the aim of delighting people.
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, Technology plays a significant role by providing sufficient internet and other benefits.
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 but not least, Economic development includes expanding their market and Innovations.
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, Walmart is an American company but it has manufacturing facilities in
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China because
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 availability. Multinational companies
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 as Apple and Toyota operate in multiple
countries
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, bringing employment opportunities and advancement of technology.
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, Few humans opposed
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 damage to local industries by pollution and climate change because of their huge manufacturing units.
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, Income inequality in labour remuneration and working hours because of low-level workers since it is an undeveloped rustic. In conclusion, Internationalization is most important for each and every
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, Especially undeveloped
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. We should maintain better relationships with all
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 as a neighbourhood for the growth and development of a georgic.

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task achievement
Your thesis statement can be clearer. Instead of saying 'According to my perspective', state your agreement or disagreement with a clear position.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point or argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (e.g., Firstly, Moreover, For instance) to connect your ideas more smoothly and improve the flow.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples for your claims, such as data or statistics about the benefits of globalization.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and sentence structure for better clarity and fluency.
content
You present a range of ideas related to globalization, illustrating some benefits and drawbacks.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international trade
  • cultural homogenization
  • multinational corporations
  • sustainable development
  • economic disparities
  • technological advancement
  • cultural exchange
  • scrutinize
  • ethics
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • protectionism
  • outsourcing
  • free market
  • trade liberalization
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