The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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I personally disagree with the issue
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the working days should be
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less. By no means should we make the weekend three days long. There are two aspects that support my point of view. First of all, now all over the world are facing an unprecedented economic recession caused by COVID-19. Many factories are forced to close and the shops shut down. The economic loss is substantial.
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, I perceive that now
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can go back to their
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would certainly be conducive to our economy. If we reduce
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, even just from a week, it would cause repercussions on our society in terms of the development of
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, I am used to
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my leisure activities
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Saturday and Sunday. If there is
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more, I would wonder what to do on that
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, and that means I have to rearrange my weekend plans. I think it would be tiring. Most importantly, I come to admit that,
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some degree, I am a workaholic. I cannot even
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if I am separated from my favourite place – my office. It is the place where I retreat
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when I feel anxious and want to get rid of everything. Working, indeed, gives me a sense of achievement and contentment. I,
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the idea of cutting
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working
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. Though some
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may argue that they need
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more in the week to reduce their stress from
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, it could be harmful to our economic growth in
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, I believe that many
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are used to the current working system, which provides two days for
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. The sudden change will make
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contused
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. Unless the government enacts a comprehensive policy for
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new system, I think the idea does not
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, and it would surely
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chaos
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our society.

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task achievement
Clarify your position in the introduction. State clearly whether you agree or disagree with the topic. The phrase 'I personally disagree with the issue' could be clearer if you simply stated 'I disagree with the idea of a shorter working week.'
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly. Each paragraph should ideally focus on a single main idea, supported by examples or evidence. For example, separate your economic argument from your personal experience more distinctly.
coherence and cohesion
Use transitional phrases to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs. This would enhance the overall coherence of your essay. For instance, phrases like 'On the other hand,' or 'Moreover,' can guide the reader through your argument more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
You effectively identified two main points in opposition to the idea of a shorter working week, which is good for structure.
task achievement
Your personal experiences add a unique touch to your argument, making your points relatable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • burnout
  • motivation
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  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
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  • consumer spending
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