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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams provided illustrate the layout of
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Harbour
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 from 2000 to the present. The
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 in general, experienced significant
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 in structure,
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 some parts remained unchanged. Explicit
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contain
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 the widening of docks, an increased number of showers and toilets, and a built hotel on the place of the previous castle. The main road on the west side of a
Porth
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 contained only one path towards the car park and toilets, in comparison, now, there are two roads and one more shower built. The Marina place for private yachts and park for fish boats have changed their placements with each other, and one more dock has been added. At the same time, certain parts of
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Harbour
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 did not have any
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.
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, the Main road and sub-road were not affected by the time, as opposed to the public beach next to the previously disused castle. Today, only hotel residents can have access to the beach,
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, there is another public beach on the north opposite side of the
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, which everyone can use. In summary, there were quite a lot of
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 in the layout of
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Harbour
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 from 2000 until today, at the same time, it was not fully turned into another version, and partially remained unchanged.

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Ensure that your introduction clearly paraphrases the task. For instance, mention that the diagrams show the changes in a harbour over time.
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Use linking words/phrases such as 'moreover', 'in addition', and 'on the other hand' to enhance the flow of ideas and connections between paragraphs.
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Provide clearer and more specific details regarding the changes. Instead of 'certain parts did not have any changes', specify which areas remained the same and how they relate to the overall changes.
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You effectively summarize the main changes in the harbour, highlighting specific developments.
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Good effort in comparing the past and present state of the harbour, which is essential for the task.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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