Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of therir work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a debate among people that employers should not

enforceing

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enforce

the

dress-code

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dress code

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over their workers and the

quailty

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quality

of work is what

matter

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matters

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.In my opinion, I

totaly

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totally

disagree, it is

imprtant

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important

for the employees as

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apart

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part

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of the organization to wear the

requiered

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required

formal clothes, because they

are represent

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represent

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the company. In

this

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essay, I will discuss

this

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matter in

details

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detail

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To begin

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with, people

ingeneral

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in general

need to differentiate between

worker

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workers

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and

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customers.

For instance

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, prestiges like

banks employee

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bank employees

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have to dress professionally, so the customers can recognize who is working

thier

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their

there

or not.

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, it is a way to set apart workers or customers, which

make

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makes

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it less

confussing

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confusing

for individuals to ask the right person for a

servies

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service

On the other hand

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, in both

public

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the public

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and private

sector

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sectors

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, they need their workforces to present a respectful image.

Due to

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that, workers have to wear a professional outfit.

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, in the military, every outfit

represent

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represents

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his

ranks

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rank

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and the department that he

belong

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belongs

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to as

military

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a military

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personal

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personnel

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Moreover

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, In

conclustion

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conclusion

works

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a worker

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outfit is vital in many

sector

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sectors

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, the majority of

work places

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workplaces

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have a

dressing

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dress

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code for their employee that

fit

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fits

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the given title and

represent

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represents

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apply

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their jobs, it is part of the job for individuals to look like they are a part of

orgnizations

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organisations

or work forces, it is not just a clothes to wear casualy.

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language

Improve grammar and spelling to enhance clarity, such as correcting 'enforceing' to 'enforcing', 'quailty' to 'quality', and 'imprtant' to 'important'.

content

Provide more detailed examples and explanations to support your arguments, particularly in the second paragraph.

coherence

Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that you elaborate on that idea with supporting details.

language

Rephrase awkward sentences for improved fluency, for example, 'which make it less confussing for individuals to ask the right person for a servies.' could be clearer.

content

You present a clear opinion from the beginning, indicating your disagreement with the statement.

content

You identify the importance of dress codes in professional settings, which is a relevant point to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

232 words

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Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of therir work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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